I paint my life in shades of black,
to omit cracks left on my track.
So no one sees the pain I hide,
stuck deep inside, my solemn guide.
I add some white, my days turn gray,
balanced displays, hope peace could stay.
But still my thoughts are awful jokes,
made up of smoke, swallow and choke.
I play pretend add yellow hues,
it sticks like glue, changing my view.
It makes the path ahead feel right,
moments turn bright, even at night.
Mineral spirits thin the paint,
without complaints or self restraints.
Let all things go so time flies free,
turn inner key, to guarantee.
– Grace Y. Estevez -Reddy
The metaphor of paint works well, especially the first two lines, which create a sense of permanence or finality, followed by the surprise of the first line in the second stanza, which adds white paint to make something absolute-sounding now go gray. Then yellow and the spirits are worked in, giving rise to more complexity.
Thanks so much for taking the time to read and comment on this piece. I truly appreciate it Christopher. Hope you have a fabulous day .💕🙏💕
This is an empowering poem, with each line radiating such exquisite beauty! Love it! This is now one of my favourite poems of yours.😮❤💕
I am so happy you enjoyed it and have made it a favorite , Aaysid. Thank you so very much.💕
You are very welcome, dear Grace.😊
This is so dense with wonderful images. A little sad, a little joyous. A notably marvelous piece it is. 💕🌟🌟💕
So happy you liked it, Lamittan. Thank you so much for all of your kind support, my friend.💕
Sure I did. You’re most welcome, my dear friend Grace. 😊
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I love this 💖💖
So glad you enjoyed it. Thanks so much.💕
thank you ❤️
This is so beautiful!!!💕💕
Thanks so much.💕❤️💕
Powerful and uplifting, Grace💕💕
Thanks so much, Aayushi.💕
Stunning poem, the perfect read for my evening, as always. Love it, Grace. ❤️
So happy to hear this, dear Jeff. Thanks so much.💕
You’re most welcome, dear Grace. Always. 💖
A perfect poignant piece, Grace. Lovely as always😍❣
Thank you so much, Suvi.💕❤️💕
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Truly colourful.
Absolutely💕
HAPPY Valentine’s day Valentine’s day
Thank you.
oh I love this poem with all of the hues and colors painted to bring visions into light Grace. Gorgeous! 💖🌈🌈🌈🌈
Happy you liked it . Thank you Cindy, for all of your kindness and support.💕
A good use of colour combination to convey the message so effectively! Good one, once again 👌💐💖
Glad you liked it, KK. Thanks so much.💕
It’s my pleasure 💖
Goodness, this is just breathtaking. Bravo!
Thank you so very much. This really means a lot to me .💕
Love, love, love.
Thanks so much, Liz.💕
This is a uniquely creative metaphor. I especially like this line: “Let all things go so time flies free…” Beautiful (and colorful) writing, Grace. 🙂
Thank you so very much, Mike.💕
“I paint my life in shades of black,” – Brilliant. That’s one hell of a opening line too.
Thanks so much. Glad you liked it.💕
Brilliant.
Thanks so much 💕
This poem is wonderful, I love how the yellow starts to change everything
I’m so glad you liked it. Thanks so much.💕